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Galatta Marriage- short comedy serial - Part 1

Discussion in 'Stories (Fiction)' started by Tamildownunder, Aug 16, 2007.

  1. Tamildownunder

    Tamildownunder Bronze IL'ite

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    Disclaimer: The names of people, places and situations are fictional and they do not have any connection to anyone. The narrative is intended comedy and please excuse me if it hurts anyone directly or indirectly.

    Part I

    Sankaran to his wife Veena: the boy's people are coming to see Vanaja. Ask her to be at home by 5.00 P.M.

    Veena: as if your daughter will listen to me. You yourself tell her.

    Sankaran: Vanaja, today the boys people are coming to see you at 6.00 P.M. be at home by 5.00 to get ready.

    Vanaja: Oh, dad! today I have an important tennis match at 4.00 P.M and I don't think I could get away from there before 5.00 P.M. You and mummy see the boy and if you like him it is O.K for me'.

    Sankaran: No. You have to come and be here before 6.00 P.M

    Vanaja: O.K, dad, I will be there.


    Mr.Gopalan and Mrs. Lakshmi Gopalan along with their son Suresh reach Sanakaran's place.

    Sankaran with folded hands: Welcome, welcome Mr. Gopalan, Mrs. Gopalan and Mr. Suresh.

    All are seated and there is some silence before Sankaran starts to speak.

    Sankaran: My daughter Vanaja should be here any moment. She has an important tennis match. Since she is our only daughter we have brought her up like a son also. He he he...

    Gopalan: O! what a contrast! Our son Suresh is also only son for us. So, we have brought him up like a daughter also. he he he.....

    Veena: O! does he know cooking, putting rangoli etc.?

    Lakshmi: We have taught him to cook for a big party. He can cook all south indian dishes as well as north indian dishes. Sometimes, I used to get tips from him. (she smiles)

    Sankaran: O! so he can easily become 'Avvai Shanmugi',saying this he laughs loudly.

    Veena: What are you talking? In Avvai Shanmugi, Kamal becomes a lady after the divorce. They have come to talk about marriage and you are talking of divorce.

    Sankaran: I just told for fun. if we say fire our mouth will not be burnt.

    Lakshmi: You said that you have brought your daughter like a son. Can you tell us what exactly you have done?

    Sankaran: She is a black-belt champion in karate, tennis champion, has cut her hair like gents' crop. She wears pant and shirt only. In fact, if you see her from behind you will say she is a boy only. He he he......

    Lakshmi: When Suresh was young during Navarathiri we used to dress him in paavadai-sattai and used to send him with a box of vermilion to invite ladies in our street. (She smiles and Suresh is beating his head)

    Right at that time Vanaja enters revolving her tennis raquet and she is wearing skimpiest of dress giving tough competition to Sania Mirza

    Vanaja: sorry I am late. Let me have a wash, change and join you.

    Sankaran: Amma Vanaja, say Hello to Suresh and his parents

    Vanaja: Namste, uncle. Namaste, aunty. Suresh you look cute. (Suresh blushes)

    Sankaran: Vanaja, change into a nice Saree and come. Yes, you put a pottu on the forehead also.

    Vanaja: Oh, dad! I don't know how to wear saree.

    Lakshmi: Don't worry, our son Suresh can help you. He knows all about sarees and how to wear them. You want madisar kattu or telungu kattu or marawari style he knows everything. (she smiles proudly)

    Veena: Vanaja, come I will show you how to wear saree.

    Veena to Lakshmi- let Suresh help her after marriage

    Sankaran: After marriage Suresh will be interested in removing the saree not in putting it on her (He laughs loudly)

    Veena gives a stare to sankaran and says: You are talking vulgar. Better keep your mouth shut.

    Sankaran: So, What Mr. Suresh is doing?

    Suresh: eating bonda uncle! ha ha ha.....

    Sankaran: Suresh is humourous. I asked what job you are doing.

    Gopalan: Suresh has done Ph.D in Physics. He has got a post-doctoral fellowship from Washington University.

    Sankaran: O! What a coincidence! Vanaja did Masters in computer science and she has got a job offer from Washington.

    To be continued..........

    Check out part 2 - here
     
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  2. sunkan

    sunkan Gold IL'ite

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    Re: Galatta Marriage- short comedy serial

    vow TDU,
    great picturisation of the scene, waiting with eager mm sk
     
  3. roopadadia

    roopadadia Silver IL'ite

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    Re: Galatta Marriage- short comedy serial

    Good one TDU, role reversal.

    warm regards
    roopa.
     
  4. abhatv

    abhatv Senior IL'ite

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    Re: Galatta Marriage- short comedy serial

    Hello TDU,

    Your story is off to an unconventional start. It is interesting. I have a small suggestion. The story looks more like a drama. Instead can you make it in reported speech? I feel that will look better.

    It is only a suggestion. If you do not feel comfortable, please continue in the same style.

    BTW your avatar is nice.

    Regards,

    Abha.
     
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    Tamildownunder Bronze IL'ite

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    Re: Galatta Marriage- short comedy serial

    Thank you, sunkan.
     
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    Re: Galatta Marriage- short comedy serial

    Thanks, roopa. yes, the whole comedy is based on role reversal and it is true nowadays.

    Regards,

    TDU
     
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    Tamildownunder Bronze IL'ite

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    Re: Galatta Marriage- short comedy serial

    Thanks Abha for your nice suggestion. I thought drama form will be easier to read and also it is easier for me to write the dialogues. I will try next time and since this I have started it in this form let me continue. Thanks for the appreciation of my avatar. I was once called poor man's Kamala Haasan.:-D

    Regards,

    TDU
     
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    Re: Galatta Marriage- short comedy serial

    TDU Sir,
    I enjoyed reading your comedy serial. its very humourous
    we need more of this kind here!

    Tulasi
     
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    Re: Galatta Marriage- short comedy serial

    TDU sir,
    I enjoyed reading Galatta Marriage. When is the next part?

    Regards,
     
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    Re: Galatta Marriage- short comedy serial

    TDU Sir,

    Enjoyed the comedy serial. Looking forward for the next one.
     

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