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Are You My Valentine?

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by twinsmom, Feb 12, 2008.

  1. twinsmom

    twinsmom Silver IL'ite

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    Two decades and some years back…
    When I followed you during Saptapadi,
    When you committed yourself to me,
    For better or for worse,
    In health and in illness
    Before seeing all my idiosyncrasies,
    When you said ‘kubool’…
    I forgot to ask you,
    Will you be my Valentine?

    Two scores of years…
    When the gynec snipped off the umbilical cord,
    I quietly took it back and tied it
    Well and tight …
    Around You, Me and the Twins…
    Secure, snug and strong…!
    Never asking you…
    If you were my Valentine!

    We stayed tied…
    Through colic, teething, insomnia,
    Homework, competitions, tests, exams,
    Bruises, braces, admissions, performance,
    License, heartbreak…dreams of future
    Since you were always with me
    During my fears, doubts and occasional tears,
    I never bothered to ask you
    Are you my Valentine?

    Sands of time…strands of grey…
    We watched our fledglings
    Poised for flight
    Each like a Jonathan Livingston Seagull,
    Stretching his wings to hug his destiny...
    Comfortable silences, shared smiles,
    Warm togetherness,
    Sans overtness…
    Just the deep understanding that
    Together, we have journeyed
    Life’s long trek…Still I haven’t
    Asked you if you’re my Valentine!

    When you say…
    This is what I’ve done for you,
    In case I am not there…
    A sharp jolt in my heart hurts me a lot!
    I say, what if I am not there?
    And when you look crestfallen,
    At the possibility,
    I realize….
    You are my Valentine- my very own Valentine!
     
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  2. Anandchitra

    Anandchitra IL Hall of Fame

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    Wonderful and excellent choice of words to say and find out who is the valentine.. Really engaging poem and words..
     
  3. Arunarc

    Arunarc Moderator Staff Member IL Hall of Fame

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    Wow well written Twinsmom
    Beautiful wordings
     
  4. Shanvy

    Shanvy IL Hall of Fame

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    TM,

    Great one from you.:clap
     
  5. Paulina

    Paulina Moderator Staff Member Platinum IL'ite

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    Hi! Twinsmom,

    Welcome back...missed reading your stories.

    Hope you are doing well now.

    "Are You My Valentine?" is a beautiful creation .

    I liked the part of the "umblical cord " binding you all .

    The entire piece is really graphic ...seemed like watching something on

    celluloid !

    The closing lines really leaves one with a lump in the throat.

    Refrence to Richard Bach's ,Jonathan Livingston Seagull is lovely too.

    Look forward to more from your pen / keyboard !

    Regards
    PAULINA:clap:clap:clap
     
  6. Meeta

    Meeta Bronze IL'ite

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    Hi TM,
    I missed you so far.......welcome back and a very nice poem.
     
  7. sunkan

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    great viju,
    great are our contributions in life but to bring into versus koyi aap se seekeyn sunkan
     
  8. sathyavenkat

    sathyavenkat New IL'ite

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    These words kept ringing in my heart for a long long time even after i finished reading this poem. Hats off to an excellent poet - affly sathya
     
  9. twinsmom

    twinsmom Silver IL'ite

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    Hi friends,
    Thank you for the overwhelming response... A decade back, no one really bothered about V Day in India... Now it is the 'in' thing... But for some like my husband and I this is what it is all about...
     
  10. twinsmom

    twinsmom Silver IL'ite

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    Sathya,
    A special word of thanks... I never felt I was good at versifying! So it comes as a pleasant surprise when someone calls me a poet!
     

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