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Discussion in 'Poetry' started by rgsrinivasan, Dec 3, 2018.

  1. rgsrinivasan

    rgsrinivasan IL Hall of Fame

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    "Ah! It went black again!",
    I pinched myself, felt the pain.
    It looked as if I was arraigned.
    I mumbled and felt raw again.

    It takes quite a long while to know
    Precious little things about the one
    With whom you'll live long and go
    One day, though you'll still long then.

    You come to know that each in fact,
    Have a glass wall around us which
    Gets sooted, by a sharp word or act,
    Feel hurt and stay distant as much.

    Perhaps a simple fact comes back
    To haunt you. Yes, we indeed hurt
    Our dear ones the most, as we lack
    Our courtesy. Now, does this hurt?

    We reconcile and continue as if
    Nothing happened and the wall
    Looks brighter, before another miff
    Paints it black and things are stalled.

    Not all are bold enough to break
    That wall and adapt without a fuss.
    It it were mutual, it would be great!
    What stops us from being the best?
     
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  2. kaniths

    kaniths Finest Post Winner

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    Deep! And, bitter truths!
    Ego? :relaxed:
     
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    Gets sooted, by a sharp word or act,
    Feel hurt and stay distant as much.

    Very nice lines....
     
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  4. rgsrinivasan

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    Thanks @kaniths for your like and feedback. Yes, ego is perhaps the prime factor. But there are others too! -rgs
     
  5. rgsrinivasan

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    Thanks a lot @anupama1 for your appreciation. -rgs
     
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    Very very beautiful and moving rgs. Loved reading it.
     
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    Dear @rgsrinivasan
    Beautiful poem....
    I loved these last lines,
    “Not all are bold enough to break
    That wall and adapt without a fuss.
    It it were mutual, it would be great!
    What stops us from being the best?”
    According to me,Our ego, pride and letting go of things stops us from being the best.

    Superbly written
     
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  8. rgsrinivasan

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    Thanks a lot @stayblessed, for your like, this appreciation and for nominating this post. Happy to get such a recognition! :) -rgs
     
  9. rgsrinivasan

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    Thanks a lot @nandinimithun, for your like, this nice feedback and for nominating this post. Happy to be recognized. :)
    Just a small note on your last line - it is about not letting go of things that forms one of the reasons. -rgs
     
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    @rgsrinivasan your poem truly deserves to be nominated....
    All the best....
    I remember reading most of your snippets, when I was new to IL....
     
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