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  1. Oct 20, 2016 #1
    rgsrinivasan

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    The spider started weaving its
    Silky black web and the first
    Thread went almost unnoticed
    In the twilight shining at its best.

    Like the gentle grayish smoke
    Coming out from a burnt wick,
    Its gentle strands din provoke
    The golden light in a move so slick.

    That gigantic spider then
    Quickly spun its denser web
    Which turned to a blanket when
    Hours passed and many felt cribbed.

    Then they started to feel soothed
    As peace prevailed upon them.
    For lonely ones who were disturbed
    The moon and stars pacified them.

    The job complete, the spider did
    Rest a while, getting tired and old.
    Impaled, and move slowly it did
    As first ray of sword came out bold.

    Wiggling and turning it did lose
    Control of its web, getting thin,
    And finally moved out of sight
    As the baby sun emerged out then.
     
    rgsrinivasan, Oct 20, 2016
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  2. Oct 20, 2016 #2
    sreemanavaneeth

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    WOW Lovely WEB writeup. you have webbed the entire site by your
    webbed wire strongly. Do web and weave more.
     
    sreemanavaneeth, Oct 20, 2016
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  3. Oct 20, 2016 #3
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    Rgs,
    Very lovely poem. Can visualise the entire picture.
    True for spider and us.
    Thanks for sharing.
    Vaidehi
     
    vaidehi71, Oct 20, 2016
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  4. Oct 20, 2016 #4
    rgsrinivasan

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    Thanks for your appreciation Sreema. Glad to receive your feedback as always. -rgs
     
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    Thanks a lot Vaidehi. This is just a translation of my tamil verse, "iravu" that I wrote this afternoon, with some changes. -rgs
     
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  6. Oct 20, 2016 #6
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    I enjoyed both'iravu' and'web.
    You have caught us inside the web.
    When I think of both'iravu' and 'web' I am reminded of an interesting event.
    A rich landlord in Uk wanted to celebrate the wedding of his son in a novel way.He thought of a new festoon design which nobody had tried so far.He chose a wedding hall three kms away from the main land.The entire distance was covered by large trees on either side.The rich father got some 20,000 special variety of spiders from Newzealand and and allowed them to reside on trees either side.The spiders started spinning a special golden coloured web connecting trees on either side.It took nearly 12 days for the spiders to cover the entire 3Km distance with a golden coloured web.In the bright moonlight the web started shining like gold giving reception to the guests.
    A fanciful golden pandal created by the nature's architect,appreciated by one and all.
    Similar is the creation by Shri Srinivasan.simply wonderful!

    jayasala 42

    jayasala 42
     
    jayasala42, Oct 20, 2016
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    That sure must have been the most wonderful decoration ever, Jayasala madam. Very creative and original too. Thanks for your lavish praise and an excellent feedback. -rgs
     
    rgsrinivasan, Oct 21, 2016
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    Wonderfully written !
     
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    Thanks Vinod Sinha for your appreciation. -rgs
     
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    Dear @rgsrinivasan ,

    When I saw the tittle I thought you were going to write on the www. But....what a lovely poem on the night! Great!

    Enjoyed! Thanks!
     
    suryakala, Oct 24, 2016
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