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The Endless Wait

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  1. Mar 3, 2019 #11
    GeetaKashyap

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    Thank you, M, for your comments.

    Loved this above expression; it is a quotable quote! A deeper analysis takes us really deep into philosophy!

    A meet between the tangible and intangible! So much hope in this wish, but can this really happen? Can we deduce then that life can never be perfect?
     
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  2. Mar 3, 2019 #12
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    Thank you for introducing me to a famous poetry here.

    Waiting and fate seem to be the common emotions here. From what I perceived, John Burroughs' work speaks of serene acceptance of fate while in my poetry, in the face of decisive impossible outcome, she waits for some miraculous turn of fate!

    I liked the confidence expressed in this stanza.
     
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    Geeta,
    Well showed a matured love story in your endless wait (Nireekshana). It is very painful to wait for someone/something when we know about it may not going to happen but hope makes us live. Sometimes miracles happen and true love wins so I hope he will come back to her.:)
     
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    I aspired to grow again
    In the rays and shimmer,
    Forged by the nudge and behest of
    Countless sunny days and warmth.

    In spirit I widen my eyes
    To urge those glazed iris,
    "Behold and keep your vision alive,
    For someone will come someday."

    He moored, a sea farer from the unknown
    And I, a confused wanderer.
    "Your eyes seem to be probing something and
    Your heart must have been misplaced" he said.

    I blinked, amused at what he wanted in me
    That was still to claim!
    Fearful, I touched his forearm
    He was not a phantom of my imagination.

    We inquired into each other
    Winds shifted and lead to cheerful days
    With blossoming trysts in the morrow.
    One day he inquired me of my past.
    Who was he?
    Holding my agitated heart
    I asked, why do you seek?
    With a charming smile and a thoughtful gaze he said,
    "Because I have grown fond of you."

    Times have rolled and so did the romance
    And the twilight rose to a full moon.
    The intrepid heart wanting to hazard
    That the journey entwines once again.
    Wasn’t meeting at the horizon a changed woman?
    Will the earth ever meet the sky? she asked him.
    Swaying in a coracle with her shored lover, she teases him playfully
    I met you, isn't that enough, he humors her.
     
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  5. Mar 3, 2019 #15
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    Thank you for this well analysed response. Uncertain waiting is a suffering but as you said, "hope makes us live."
     
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    :beer-toast1:
    Awesome; a second take on life!:hearteyes:

    Part 1:
    Eta poyindo mana anuragam
    Kshanam kshanam
    Kanneelato nee nireekshanam..

    Part 2:
    Malli ochhindi naa jeevitamlo
    ee suyogam. Premabhishekam
    Premaku pattabhishekam!:sunglasses:
     
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    Yes, sequential reckoning!

    (Not to counteract the pathos in the poem.) Your original handiwork is classical woven and well-written. As a kid, I would cheerfully recite my own happily-ever-after sequel narrative to even the most tragic and unredeemable films. But Heer and Ranjha are dead! No no, they are just having some picnic in heaven. That’s me, the Eeyore’s foil since my living memory.

    I enjoyed your thoughtful ‘nirikshanam-pattabhishekham’ gesture in my continuation and language. You are hearty in surprises! Though online limits friendly intimacy, you have widespread stood out as the emblematic warmth to your virtual cohorts. You have implanted a certain pervasive bonhomie in IL, in that, any onlooker hesitant to interrupt and readily cuddle would follow suit of your congenial advancement. (oblique observation!)
     
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    Good one, Geeta. Deep yet an easy read.

    For some reason, I am imagining the inn to be near a lighthouse. The shape of the sitting woman matches the shape of the poem's lines. : )

    When I read the poem, I didn't interpret a false promise. Maybe an indecisive answer.

    Nice. Like a movie whose message or question stays in the mind long after we leave the theater.
     
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    "Implanted a pervasive bonhomie" -- so well put.
     
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    @Novalis,

    @Mistt and you are inspiring me to appreciate and understand Telugu better and now be prepared to face the consequences! :tonguewink:Btw, Premabhishekam....is lifted straight away from an ANR and Sridevi film by the same name!

    Thanks for your kind observation; beauty is in the eyes of the beholder!
     
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