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Rocket raja - best short story adjudged by the writers guild of india

Discussion in 'Stories (Fiction)' started by sureshmiyer, Mar 2, 2010.

  1. sureshmiyer

    sureshmiyer Silver IL'ite

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    Raja was standing before a busy Railway Junction. He was a smart young guy. He was feeling very nervous. His fingers were itching. He had to do it anyway. If he did not do it this time, he will be mocked by his group. It was tempting, but he was feeling on the edge. It was almost like a question of Life and Death for him.

    The girl passed by him. She was looking very pretty and was wearing a white top and blue tight fit jeans. On the T shirt was written the words.


    Do Not Look At Me. I Know I am Hot.


    There was a mild scent in the air as she passed him. The sun was beginning to set and the rays made her gleam. Too many people were proceeding towards the railway station, while some were buying fruits, napkins, books, household items across many of the stalls. Some were just huddled in groups chit-chatting.

    Raj concentrated on the girl. He did not know what fate lay in store for him this time. The first time, he did it; he was chased by the crowd. The second time, he was almost beaten up but rescued by his companions.

    “Dey, Indha dhadavai miss pannadharaa” shouted one of his companions. (Don’t miss this time). He could see a group of eve-teasers on the other side of the road. They whistled at the girl as she moved past them. Nothing could distract him this time. He was determined. Millions of emotions raced through his small mind.

    The girl was dodging smartly between the crowd and the roadside hawkers. His legs were moving swiftly behind the girl and in no time, he came shoulder to shoulder with her. He gently brushed on her arms and his fingers felt her butt. The girl did not even have an inkling of his intentions. He zipped past swiftly and got lost on the crowd. His face was beaming with pride as he approached his group of companions who watched him with a gasp. They stood scattered near the staircase of the station.

    What started as a temptation became a habit for him. He swiftly climbed the stairs and brushed past five in the crowd.
    ……………….





    This time, they were men, some middle-aged and some young. It was even better this time.

    Soon it was night. They sat on the first floor of an under-construction flat. As one of them removed his pack of cards, the other one remarked “Hey Raja, take the booty out.” Raja spreads open his bag and dropped the wallets on the floor. All of them started counting. They collected coolly a sum of Rs.7,500/-. They distributed Rs.1400/- among themselves and gave Rs.1900/- to Raja as a reward for his exploits.

    A few credit cards too lay on the floor alongwith a hi-tech mobile phone.

    Raja was a confident young man now. His fingers worked in a smooth precision with a hidden blade in between. They zipped into the pockets of unsuspecting men and women like a rocket and came out like lightning. He became increasingly popular in his group.

    No one calls him Raja anymore. They call him “Rocket Raja”.
     
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  2. karunamurty

    karunamurty Bronze IL'ite

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    The short story "Rocket Raja" was an interesting read.
    Thanks for sharing the award winning short story.
    Who is the author of this story???
     
  3. sureshmiyer

    sureshmiyer Silver IL'ite

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    hi karuna

    the short story was written by me last year.
    Thanks for reading.
    I had sent it for the Pongal competitions held by the WGI
    Two of my short stories including this one got the prize

    Cheers

    suresh
     
  4. sureshmiyer

    sureshmiyer Silver IL'ite

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    sharanyadevi Gold IL'ite

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    Good one and good narrations...
    Rocket Raja was wonderfully written, thanks for sharing..:)
     
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    aruna_077 Senior IL'ite

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    Dear Suresh,

    Indeed a good story with a twist in the end.

    The first part of the story reminds me of the song "Yennakku oru girlfriend vennumada" from Boys. Where the fat guy would brush past the fat ladies :rotfl:rotfl
     
  7. sureshmiyer

    sureshmiyer Silver IL'ite

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    thanks sharanya

    happy you loved my story

    cheers
    suresh
     
  8. sureshmiyer

    sureshmiyer Silver IL'ite

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    hi thanks

    aha, it reminded you of the song from Boys
    !!!
    cheers
    suresh
     
  9. knot2share

    knot2share Gold IL'ite

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    Just read an article by a celebrity writer here in IL and here another one!!

    Congratulations on the win.

    Rocket Raja.......nice name!
     
  10. sureshmiyer

    sureshmiyer Silver IL'ite

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    thanks knot2share
    Feel privileged to be receiving compliments from a celebrity commentator like you :)

    cheers
    suresh
     

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