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Poem About Nothing

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by SuiDhaaga, Feb 2, 2022.

  1. SuiDhaaga

    SuiDhaaga Platinum IL'ite

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    To tired to write
    I am all spent
    There are some battles
    Not worth a fight

    We think we are fortunate
    Then we feel sad
    When we count our blessings
    We get glad

    Life is no guarantee
    We have Guardian Angels protecting us
    Else we will be ground into
    Fine powder
    Finer than the finest tea

    Where are we going
    Why are we so fast
    It is only our moments
    That will last and last
     
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  2. Thyagarajan

    Thyagarajan IL Hall of Fame

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    :hello: On the one hand, it has the ordered, and of Neoclassical poetry. On the other hand, it tends toward the emotionalism and individualism of the poets; most importantly,

    Too ( not to) tired to write about nothingness - you mean empty soul -
    But you wrote substantially!
    A “Spent force” realises the futility of taking up unwon battles huge or tiny.
    A gladness follows sadness is ok. But then in life of everyone, it can’t be forever only sadness or gladness. They come in progressive waves.
    It is always parents who takes care of their children in an unselfish manner. They remain till their last breath as their children’s guardian angels.

    Dawn to dusk
    People sprint
    East to west
    To keep wolf away
    From the door

    West to east
    They Return
    In an ambulance
    Landing in hot
    Simmering soup.

    Instead of usual Romantic lines or stanzas, here you had posted
    something entirely different with “balanced phrasing” expressing a kind of rational sentiments mixed with rare Emotions.

    Thanks and Regards.
     
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