Hi Pals, Need your help now... One of my friend writes poems.. I am posting couple of her works on behalf of her. Kindly post your feedback whatever it may be.. She can develop na.... :hide: Here are they: [FONT="]LIFE AT THE HANDS OF FATE[/FONT] [FONT="]It was dark, it was scary[/FONT] [FONT="]I was all lost, I was all alone[/FONT] [FONT="]I heard the screaming of ghosts!![/FONT] [FONT="]I shivered and trembled with fear,[/FONT] [FONT="]That is when I heard the voice of the faceless guy,[/FONT] [FONT="]His words, so comforting, so soothing!![/FONT] [FONT="]He held my hands tightly, promised never to let me go,[/FONT] [FONT="]He wiped my tears, lightened a hope,[/FONT] [FONT="]I felt safer, than in my mother’s womb!![/FONT] [FONT="]I felt stronger than the strongest material[/FONT] [FONT="]He then led me to a lonely house,[/FONT] [FONT="]Where I saw, bones strewn about the place[/FONT] [FONT="]And drops of blood on the floor,[/FONT] [FONT="]In the flash of lightning, for the first time[/FONT] [FONT="]I met his eyes, devoid of mercy!![/FONT] [FONT="]I stood there numb, smiling at death!![/FONT] [FONT="]A starlit night…[/FONT] [FONT="]To gaze and gaze at the twinkling stars..[/FONT] [FONT="]When those wordless feelings melts down as tears,[/FONT] [FONT="]I wonder at the irony of the night[/FONT] [FONT="]The darkness of the sky removing the darkness within with all its might!![/FONT] [FONT="]My innocent heart has to bear no more,[/FONT] [FONT="]Can throw away the mask it wore,[/FONT] [FONT="]No more faked smiles, No more honey coated daggers,[/FONT] [FONT="]Nothing to fret, nothing to fear!![/FONT] [FONT="]With her angelic beams of light, the moon[/FONT] [FONT="]For me to sleep has knit a lovely cocoon!![/FONT] [FONT="]The soft breeze plants a sweet good night kiss.[/FONT] [FONT="]When on earth, I discovered perfect bliss!![/FONT] Cheers, Marun
dear marun, did your friend write this?( kidding) she brought different feelings in the two poems. i feel some hoe the first brings some sort of negative feelings. in the second one she twinkles. with love pad.
Hi pad, Yeah off-course, My friend's write-up. And thanks for your feedback. Will definitely let her know. :thumbsup Thanks for your comment bujji. :crazy
Marun, Your friend's first one....new dimension on death becoming so comforting, soothing and a safe one. In the second one..even though she writes about sleep.. this is soothing indeed...no masks needed..how true..one with nature.. Nature always soothes us.. sriniketan
dear marun tell your friend she has a very soft heart and responds in different ways to situations l liked these words"When those wordless feelings melts down as tears," true isnt it... tell her to continue expressing .......... radha
Will tell her for sure mate. The reason why i post this poem here is she feels pretty odd about her works. She will definitely love to see your comments radha. Thanks a lot. :thumbsup
Hi mates, I just bumped this thread to thanks u pals once again for such nice comments. I have showed this thread to my friend.. She was very happy and i have never saw her excited like that before. I think she will write out of that excitement. Thanks pals. :thumbsup I still wonder if u are fine!! though u let my heart bleed without blood Stain!! will i ever be able to make you mine Or will my love for u just go in vain?? One among her poem... And my favorite... :cheers:
