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Eatables......... And everything else...

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by Quebec, Jun 13, 2012.

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  1. Feb 16, 2013 #41
    cedantseq

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    very poetic thread, i love it
     
    cedantseq, Feb 16, 2013
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  2. Feb 20, 2013 #42
    Quebec

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    Pyaar ki rut hai IL mein aayi,
    sabb pyaare ILiets ke mukh pe muskaan hai laayi,

    har taraf khushiyoon ki ho rahi hai BAARISH,
    poori ho jaye ILiets's ki iccha bass rabb yahi hai guzaarish,

    banne jo jodi voh ho lakhon mein ekk,
    unki pyaar ke safar mein lage naa kabhi break,

    mazaa bhi hai aa raha dekh kar masoom bacchon si muskaan,
    ekk aur bhola panchee aa gaya iss daal par naam jiska ******n,

    ekk chhoti si koshish hai yeh... ekk pauda jisse hona hai abhi badaa,
    parr wishes hain sabb IL's ki isske saath jabb takk khuud apne pairon pe nahi ho jaata khadaa,

    chalo dekhte hai kitni door hai manzil aur pyaar paane mein hai aur kitna faasla,
    chaahat ka imtehaan hai yeh ekk mukamil silsilaa..............
     
    Quebec, Feb 20, 2013
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  3. Mar 13, 2013 #43
    Quebec

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    Shaam dhal gayi hai raat hai aayi,
    dekho rabb ne mere liye taaron ki chaadar bichaayee,

    itne sunder taaron ke biich bhi alag chamakta hai chaand,
    raahi bhi naapta hai peher isko taaron se baandh,

    youn hi tu mere liye hai sanam sab jahaan se parre,
    jab bhi yaad karega mujhe paayega do kadam par khade,

    iss kadar tere khayaal mein hun main khoya.
    Nahin jaanta kab jaaga kab jaakar mein soya,

    sachh keh gaye hai yeh sant fakeer,
    aur jo kahaaniya banaa gaye rajhe aur heer,

    ki pyaar iss shiddatt se jab kiya jaata hai ke rahe na koi hosh,
    to rabb ki bhi awaaj sunaayi deti hai agar kuch pal bethein khamosh,

    abb aur kuch naa reh gaya hai mere bolne ko oo mere shona,
    bass hai guzaarish ke dil sambhalana mera na samajhna khilona........
     
    Quebec, Mar 13, 2013
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  4. Apr 3, 2013 #44
    Dinny

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    Wow!!!
    You guys are tooo good PD and QBee:bowdown

    And you liar QBee .....you said " nai yaar shayaari is very difficult its not my cup of tea .....instead i will do my phraseology"......liar liar liar:rant

    And eatables QBee....i am surprised...what a menu you have...paranthas...rice...bread.....nimbupaani....
    QBee itna smart hai
    Hume ab pata chala hai
    Btw kuch banana bhi aata hai
    ki inpe sirf shayaari karni aati hai??? :)
     
    Dinny, Apr 3, 2013
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  5. Apr 3, 2013 #45
    archana506

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    very nice ones..
     
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  6. Apr 3, 2013 #46
    Quebec

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    @archana506,

    thank you very much...

    Take care
    chow
     
    Quebec, Apr 3, 2013
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  7. Apr 3, 2013 #47
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    @dinny,

    phalees, there is a diffrence b/w shaayri and this....... Shaayari has depth as well as resonance of what it conveys..... I lack depth......

    Haan haan sabb bana sakta hun.... Pehle darr lagta tha..... Abb pata hai ki jo bhi banana hai use tadke me daalo aur bann gaya...... Tadka is the center of all dishes...... So there......

    Take care
    chow
     
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  8. Apr 3, 2013 #48
    Dinny

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    Oh!! QBee you have cracked it finally......its tadka...right...dont tell me all you eat is tadka and no curry ....:)
     
    Dinny, Apr 3, 2013
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  9. Apr 3, 2013 #49
    Dinny

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    QBee i can see luvvuu in those lines ...:)

    Yes i agree that you need to bring in a bit more "depth" and a lot of resonance (tingggggg-g-gg)....but still its good going by my standards..
     
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  10. Apr 4, 2013 #50
    Dinny

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    Nudge....nudge....nudge
    Congestion ...
     
    Dinny, Apr 4, 2013
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