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A memorable moment

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by Bpremalatha, Nov 4, 2011.

  1. Bpremalatha

    Bpremalatha Gold IL'ite

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    Blew by wind to heavenly place, lead by god
    Realized am not an angel nor fairy, to fill any life with pleasure,
    Neither a Princess nor Goddess, to make any one's presence proud,
    Neither a rose nor jasmine, to fill fragrance around any,
    A withered, dead, dry flower, with no fragrance, no life,

    Blew by wind to heavenly place,
    Promising god to be back, I made my way towards you.
    Swirling around you, made your eye to catch my sight,
    Enjoyed the pleasure of being yours, just your own,
    When thy hand stretched towards me, to feel me,

    Blew by wind to heavenly place,
    Fell at your feet, within glimpses of your eye,
    kissed your feet, Small quavering voice after long time,
    With tears in eyes, and vision blurred,
    Made a memorable note, Your arms deserve an angel not me.

    Blew by wind to heavenly place,
    Made my words to float in air, for few minutes, until I quit,
    Thank you charm, Thank you, making me feel to be yours, in my dreams,
    Marking it the last memorable moment, I lived with you,
    Back to my promise, blew by wind to heavenly place, my last destination.
     
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  2. navis

    navis Gold IL'ite

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    hi,premlatha,

    beautiful verses dear,really touching
    loved readin it.

    you have outwithed our poet vairamuthu.keep rocking

    regards
    navis
     
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    Bpremalatha Gold IL'ite

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    Thank you Navis...I am glad with only so much that u liked my lines...
    I am nowhere to such legends..
    These lines were not rhymed properly............ Still I liked it..so posted here..
     
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    hi,premalatha,

    its important for one to convey the exact message to others you did the part perfect.
    so, dont care about the rymed part
    i loved your words so i feel there is nothing wrong in comparing the upcoming legend with him

    you are rocking dear,
    with lots of love
    navis
     
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    Hi Prema...
    I think its not rhymes that makes a poem beautiful but its the choice of words and stringing them is what matter and this poem is very beautiful dear but I would like to

    Be it Angel or demon
    ONly I make them with my ways
    Its in me to be an angel or a demon
    So I will correct my ways...

    God you are there for all
    You I seek to help me choose
    Judiciously and be what I chose
    I know you will in all mercy will be within me

    I beseech you
    Light the candle of Truth
    To see my true Self
    And to lose myself in it....
     
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    Bpremalatha Gold IL'ite

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    Nice lines yeah VJ..
    Thanks for your comments and the lines complementing it... :)
     
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    shakespeares' or who's or your's own
     
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