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  1. Apr 5, 2017 #41
    meepre

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    Great writing BB, you have explained the past (meena bad mouthing priya) in a present conversation. This is great. Amazing narration waiting for more.
     
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  2. Apr 5, 2017 #42
    blackbeauty84

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    Thanks much meepre. Glad you liked this style.
     
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  3. Apr 5, 2017 #43
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    Nice going BB.
     
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    I just stumbled upon this story and read all the episodes in one go, you are developing the story nicely.
    I liked the way how timely you are linking to 'At the right time' where the new reader can easily know about the previous story.
    Good going.
     
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  5. Apr 5, 2017 #45
    blackbeauty84

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    Thanks stayblessed
     
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  6. Apr 5, 2017 #46
    blackbeauty84

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    Thanks much for your feedback Anupama. I want this to be a independent read so that I dont force the reader
     
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  7. Apr 6, 2017 #47
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    @blackbeauty84 - Nice sequence. It's always a wonder on what happens after the "happily ever after" wedding scene. Thank you for a giving us a glimpse into it and another story
     
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  8. Apr 6, 2017 #48
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    Nice update ma'am but too short....little more info please what was that srikanth sharing with priya?? interesting flow but why the family members are away from each other :(
    waiting for the HW ceremony....& to see the happy union of the family....Sply our young and charming hero Jai hahah
     
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  9. Apr 7, 2017 #49
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    Thank you Mriduna. I too used to wonder what happens post that that's why thought of bringing this side of story.
     
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    Thanks Adharv. Both Srikanth and sriram are hostelites, so yes family is away from each other.Few more chapters they will all be together.
     
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