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Discussion in 'Poetry' started by Scorpio707, May 14, 2015.

  1. Scorpio707

    Scorpio707 Platinum IL'ite

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    We see each other daily as we pass by…
    Neither acknowledge nor say hi…
    But always see through the corner of eye…
    For long this has been going on…
    Today was just another dawn….
    Wonder what you think of me…
    Wonder why I think of thee….
    Eyes search for you as that time nears...
    But unable to muster courage and volunteer…
    Feel sad when you walk out and leave…
    Wish to follow you and see, but fear
    What you would perceive…
    Hope that day would arrive soon….
    I would wait for many moons…
    Just to say hi…is this a bane or
    A boon??
     
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    Lathasv IL Hall of Fame

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    :)Nice poem
    I think we should forget our ego ,I mean who is to say first hi.Then it will be fine
     
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    Latha....know what...your response was like poetry for me :mrgreen: . Thanks
     
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    VanithaSudhir Platinum IL'ite

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    I am interested to know who that person is.. who has caught S7's attention. :) :) :)
     
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    jskls IL Hall of Fame

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    I have had similar experience and am still in that boat, but never had the courage to say 'Hi'. the feeling that will I be looked down if I say hi kind of lingers even after they are gone. Wonder if they will also think of saying 'hi' but have the same feeling and pass by?
     
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    Scorpio707 Platinum IL'ite

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    Hahahha....good Q Vanitha

    Characters in my poem are fictitious with a few exceptions :wink: resemblance to anyone living or dead is purely coincidental :mrgreen: Harhar
     
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    You know Laks, sometimes eyes can speak volumes than words can do. Maybe the person your referring to could also be thinking the same, next time don't think just say hi and let go...what's the harm na :)
     
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    Just for your review

    We see each other daily as we pass by..
    Afraid of world we neither acknowledge nor say hi..
    But to acknowledge my feeling and console my heart, I see you through corner of eye..
    Like this do not how much time have gone,
    Today was just another dawn playing same old song,
    Wonder what you think of me..
    Wonder thee know what I think of thee..
    Its the same place and same time for me...
    Feeling waiting to attack with same twinge...
    Do not know should I muster courage and getover once and for all,
    or should I feel sad when you leave for day work task...
    When I realise that you have gone...
    Wish to follow you and see...
    But you would have gone long into past...
    Hope that day would arrive soon...
    I would wait for many moon..
    When world will break all shackles of narrow ment..
    And blue sky will give me courage to say hi...
    I will never again miss a chance to be with you till time say us good bye...
     
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    This was nice :) . The last line when I read seemed like an emotion out of desperation, one of them is falling in love, don't think I intended that in mine, it's pure infatuation :-D

    BTW just out of curiosity why did you choose to modify it and write your version :)
     
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    VanithaSudhir Platinum IL'ite

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    Your poems are legends.. So had the privilege of remix, I guess.. Lolz
     
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