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You Are Missing In My Heart!

Discussion in 'Stories (Fiction)' started by Rajeni, Jun 2, 2016.

  1. Rajeni

    Rajeni Finest Post Winner

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    Dear Friends,

    I am back here with another story! Some of you might already know that there is an on-going story on mine in the Regional Stories forum and you may ask why am I even starting this without completing the on-going one!

    I was debating with myself to postpone this and finish the existing one! but the more I postpone the more the characters bug me to write about them! Yes, its really hard to keep them only in my mind, post conceiving them :D

    This is a different genre for me and am an amateur in this genre! So please bear with me and give me your valuable feedback! Wear that critical hat of yours and show me my mistakes whenever I commit one and help me develop my writing!!

    With that let me jump into the first episode!!
     
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    Wow wow Rajeni.... you just surprised me... am very eager to read your story dear.... Everybody will be happy to read your writings dear.... Am just excited too much. Please post the story.... All the very best for your new start. Rock the forum dear.
     
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    Part 1

    Abhinay stepped out of the shower with a white turkey towel draped around his waist and stood before the dressing table. The large dressing mirror custom made for his 6’1” frame reflected his well-toned masculine body without an extra ounce of muscle. He turned slightly towards his right and saw the four inch stitch mark prominently sitting on the left side of his abdomen. His facial expression hardened with his firm jawline tightly set and his dark grey eyes turning to steel. He stood there like a statue, like a Greek God!

    Abhinay – Abhinay Prithviraj, is the Chief Architect and Managing Director of The SP Architects, a fast growing Architectural Firm based out of Bangalore. His father late Prithviraj was a Civil Engineer and his mother Samyuktha is a homemaker. He had an amazing childhood with his lovely parents and his wonderful younger sister Arundhati, who got married recently to his best friend and business partner – Midhun.

    He was shaken to reality by Samyuktha’s voice, “Abhi.. Abhi.. it’s getting late.. come for Breakfast now, else you will plan to skip it..”

    A small smile cracked on his lips on hearing her, “Maa.. coming.. gimme 10 mins..”

    He quickly changed to a blue Van Heusen formal shirt and black trousers. He applied a little hair gel to his semi-wet hair and locked the wet look, sprayed his Aqua Di Gio perfume and went out to the dining room.

    Samyuktha who came from the kitchen carrying plates for breakfast, saw her son coming and said, “So sir has decided to have breakfast today! How lucky I am to receive such kindness…”

    “My dear drama queen.. save your acting for another time and please give me my breakfast, am getting late”


    “Oh! I started looking like a drama queen to you?! Fine!”
    She said curtly and served him with a long face.

    Abhinay finished his breakfast without glancing at her and went to the kitchen carrying his plate, as it is his usual habit, like his father. They never allow her to carry their soiled plates.

    Samyuktha sat at the dining table maintaining the long face, watching Abhi from the corner of her eyes. Abhi, who was also watching her, came laughing and bent towards her and hugged her shoulders from the back. He placed his cheeks on his mother’s cheek and said, “Now my dear Kiddo.. give your son a Kiss and have your breakfast.. You are not a drama queen but the queen of my palace.” Saying so, he tilted his head offering his cheek to her, arched his eyebrows and looked her from the corner of his eyes.

    Samyuktha laughed seeing his expression. She exclaimed, “Now see who is being dramatic! It’s you who is a drama King my boy!!” and planted kisses on both of his cheeks.

    Samyuktha saw Abhinay walking towards his room in the formal attire more like a model. What is that that he lacks! She asked herself. Abhinay is 29 years old now and Samyuktha would give anything to the one who can convince him to get married. She sensed that Abhinay is in a good mood and considered whether to talk about Preethi to him now. From past experiences, she knew how his mood changes when she breeches the topic of marriage, 'but I can’t leave it just like that..' she told herself and knocked his room.

    “Come in Maa.. is there another episode today” he asked playfully continuing their dining table talk while he was collecting and arranging some sketches from his drawing table.

    Samyuktha stood there indecisive. She wanted to talk to Abhinay about the new alliance, at the same time she doesn’t want to spoil the cheerful mood that he is in at the moment. He looked at his face adorned with that playful boy-like smile. How she wished that it stays there forever!

    As Samyuktha didn’t reply, Abhi turned and looked at her standing there lost in thoughts. He came near her and asked in a serious tone, “What is it Maa..? Do you wanna talk to me about something?”

    “Abhi.. You know Prema aunty right? She has a niece and her name is Preethi.. Prema is a nice person who will not suggest anything that would not suit us.. You just meet Preethi once and see whether you like her..” finishing what she wanted to say, she stood there watching his expression.

    Abhi took a long breath.. “Maa.. I have told you many times.. am not interested in marriage right now..” he pleaded

    “Give me one reason, why you don’t want to marry now?” she sounded anry!

    “Maa.. please..”

    “Abhi.. now don’t get mad at me for asking this but are you still not out of your past?” This is the first time Samyuktha touched that topic, she knows that it would hurt him, but she had to know, this is important for her!

    Abhinay didn’t know what answer to make. It’s a both ‘yes’ and ‘no’! He remained silent for a minute and the said. “Nothing like that Maa..”

    “Then why my dear..” his Mom’s voice was pleading.

    “Ma now you please don’t start crying.. I will definitely get married when I meet the right person.. ok? Now please stop worrying and stay happy”

    Samyuktha is in no mood to leave the topic hearing the promising reply from him, “That’s wonderful.. so gimme your criteria of a right person and I will search along those lines!!” she said enthusiastically!

    “My eyes would show me the right person and my heart will tell me that she is the one!” Abhi said with a smile and winked at her.


    “Ahh.. really.. without eyeing any girl anywhere.. your eyes would pick the right girl.. you are impossible Abhi”
    she said sarcastically and understanding that it is getting nowhere she left his room, talking aloud to herself, “right person! I dunno who is that.. If I get to know I will go straight to her and fall at her feet asking her to be my daughter in law”

    Abhinay smiled hearing his Mom and murmured, “Same here Mom! I would do anything to know where she is!” saying so, he closed his door and went to his wardrobe.

    He opened the secret locker in his wardrobe and took a rectangular dark maroon box from it. He opened it and stared inside it – There laid a pearl bracelet on the velvet lining of the box! They are fresh water pearls with a mild tint of peach shade. There are three individual pearl lines which are connected together at both the ends to the hooks. The pearls in each line are arranged in such a way that there is half a centimeter distance between each pearl which is covered with a silver line. He slowly took it in his fingers and stood dazzled staring at it. Those mesmerizing eyes flashed in his memory and he felt the tip of that pistachio green shawl graze his face. He murmured “Where are you, Angel?” and started humming,

    “Kanavodu vandhai Penne; Neril vara pozhudhillaiyo!


    Thavam podhavillai endre; Devadhai varavillaiyo!”


    (You came in dreams, My girl, Don’t you have time to come in person!

    Is it due to my lack of penance, Oh Angel, you didn’t come yet!)

    (Cont.)
     
  4. Rajeni

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    My Goodness! Priya... You gave me a boost even before I posted the first part! Love you dear! Thanks for your encouraging FB :)
     
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    Good start

     
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    Thanks a lot Harini! Hope you would continue reading!!
     
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    Hi,

    I generally read all the stories and poems for the past 3 months,but I used to think will give my Fb after reading the last episode,but I keep forgetting it or postpone it.

    SO started posting Fb immediately.


     
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    That's really so nice of You!! And when you post FB inbetween the story, the writers would be more encouraged to continue the story and really its such a motivation for us! :)
     
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    Hi,
    This is the First time am reading your story!!!:blush:
    Too professional and gripping as well!! Enjoyed the Part 1.:blush::blush::blush:
    Also loved the bond between mom and son:blush::blush::blush:
    Eagerly waiting for the next part!!!
    And yes love the last two lines!!! sweet one!!!:blush::blush::blush:
     
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    Hi Rajeni,
    A pleasant start of the story.
    All the best and thanks for giving us a story.

    PS
     

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