Discussion in 'Stories (Fiction)' started by Rith, Feb 20, 2019.
@Rith who is at the entrance pa?
A gripping heart wrenching serial story characters of which set carefully in real time that begins from Chinese aggression 1962 or 1969 - Guna a war veteran reminds me of my college days. The character Dr Kalyani’s Demeanour throughout episodes described in a befitting manner closely resembling then popular Dr. Kalyani - gynaecologist- in her famous hospital at Edward elliot’s Road.
2. The narration style reminds me of na. Parathasarathy of Kalki & Ms. Lakshmi of Anandha vikadan (from Johannesburg) of 1950s & 1960s. The character Prasanna resembles “Sathya Moorthy” hero of na. Pa. in which heroine go rapturous describing and comparing the feet of Sathya to a blooming lotus.
3. Meera seems to me a real character crossed my mind. A “Meera” came to our family for a brief period stood adopted and left only to join and leave us after twelve years.
Boominathans settled in COIMBATORE also resembles my family friend and from your descriptions, I find his daughter now had become grand mother of two.
4. Episodes during and after reading, one would find a kind of equanimity that would urge to greet the author. Thanks to OP.
5. Kudos to your narrative style.
God lives gloriously through noble characters indeed.
Oh my God, I pinching myself so hard. Sir, I never expect such a lovely feedback from you and I curse myself for missing this all these days. Work is so hectic for the past three months so I couldn't be regular here.
Thank you so much Sir. Thanks a ton for making my day.
I am feeling blessed. This story is a dedication to my close friend who means life to me. her name is Meera @ Jayalakshmi.
You are already stand blessed but for which such a nice serial with poignant characters could not have come out of your soul fill or soulful writing. I am glad of your recording here that the serialette dedicated to your bosom pal Ms jayalakshmi @Meera.
2. I do hope you would find time to read others’ posts including my humble contributions in various forums including non fiction and fiction.
God bless the writers by giving stunning profound ideas in their dreams.
Dear All, I will post the next episode tomorrow Sorry for the delay
“Mohan???” Boomi stood puzzled seeing Mohan and Lalitha
“There is no point in asking how you are, knowing how you would be at present” he looked at Saradha who was lying on the ground holding her cheeks “I am sorry. I will come later” saying Mohan turned to exit
“Come in Mohan” Boomi ordered sitting on the sofa “you need not justify what you said as I know already what all chaos my silence has created”
“I actually came to fight with you. But I am glad that you have understand things now. All is well. All is going to be well soon. Stay relaxed” – Mohan
“I can’t stay relax until I find Meera and bring her back home. She called me today. She is settled with a job and paid this month installment towards her loan” he stressed the last statement looking at Saradha
Mohan and Lalitha looked at each other and shared satisfactory smile.
“Its been years we met. It is almost more than a decade. But are you in touch with…”
“You guessed it right. We are…ahemm….were in contact with Meera. Many a times I wanted to slam you and this lady but I controlled myself. Poor girl she is. She felt living alone rather than living here. I am feeling bad I couldn’t be a moral support at the crisis time. I happen to hear all you spoke. I admit that this realization should have come long back, but yeah, better late than never. I will stand shoulders to shoulders with you. Here is my number. Call me if you need anything. Let’s revive our old relationship, shall we?”
“Sure, but do you know about Meera? So, did she tell you where is she now?” Mohan was slightly taken aback by his question. Meera has seeked promise that they won’t reveal about her whereabouts
Mohan nodded his head as No. “I told you right, I was in contact with her. I came in search of her now” he replied bluntly
Boomi called the bank manager and confirmed that the loan installment has been paid
“I would like to meet Mr. Gunasekar and his wife. I will enquire his address with the security and meet him. Let me take your leave now” saying Mohan got up
Saradha and Lalitha stayed calm without talking
Boomi “Not required. I know his residence. I heard that he is back to home but I am yet to meet him. Come, I will take you”
Mohan was surprised “How do you know him?” wondering how Boomi knows Guna
Boomi smiled and said “came to know when I go searching for my daughter”
Saradha stood shocked. There were so many things happened without her knowledge and she was completely kept in dark. By their way of talking, she could recollect and correlate the couple she met at the entrance of library would be Guna and Kalyani whom Mohan and Boomi are talking about
“I would like to join you” she mumbled
“Lets go Mohan. Come Lalitha, lets move” Boomi screamed and three went away leaving Saradha. She stood up, adjusted her hair into a bun, locked the door and walked behind their car. She vaguely remembered their face and she wants to meet them
The car vanished from sight taking the right. She stopped at the right turn wondering which way to proceed. There were more than 6 lanes and each lane had 20 houses on each side. She walked bluntly while the vegetable vendor passed her. She stopped him and enquired whether he has any idea about the doctor or retired commander’s house. He pointed the 4th lane and mentioned 4th house on the right. She thanked him and walked towards the direction. She identified the house with the car Mohan came which was parked at the entrance. The security stood up and gave a puzzled look at her.
“I am Mrs.Boominathan, the one who just came in to meet the doctor” she said pointing to the car. Her swollen eyes and messy hair made him to conclude she is lying. When he entered in to check she swiftly followed him and stood next to the door stopping him to proceed signaling him to be calm. Her grip was so tight enough, he obeyed to her words and stood next to her.
Boomi introduced Mohan and Lalitha. Guna’s face turned bright seeing them “Is that you Mohan. I wanted to meet you” said Guna grabbing his hands. The main purpose of Mohan’s visit is to meet Guna by any chance. He reciprocated his happiness through a wide smile and gratitude filled eyes.
Guna, Boomi and Mohan was sitting on a sofa where Kalyani and Lalitha were seated opposite to them. Prasanna was seated on the recliner.
By the time she reached there, normal enquiries about Guna’s health were done. She was at the apt time when they started discussing about Meera which she was so curious upon.
“Meera called me to convey she has paid her loan due of this month. She has settled with some job”
“The same number or any new number” Prasanna asked
“That was a whats up call, yeah new number” Boomi replied
Mohan and Lalitha were watching silently while Guna was listening with a smile
“My daughter is safe and alive” concluded Boomi closing his eyes folding his hands “she has made me realize my mistake that I have been committing all these years”
Mohan and Lalitha looked at each other and grinned. Prasanna noticed that, clueless about their gesture.
Guna observed Mohan and Lalitha. He could see traces of worries on Boomi’s face but not on theirs. They looked cool and composed.
“Boominathan, at this point what I can tell you is…” he made a pause and looked at everyone at room and said “My Meera will come back to me within a month or say two. But definitely not beyond that”
“What made you to conclude so?” questioned Kalyani
“My love on her and her love on me. Neither of them are fake” said Guna confidently “If I am wrong, either of our love is fake, DOT”
Every one stayed speechless. Boomi, Mohan and Lalitha took their leave. Saradha swiftly moved out and ran towards her house. After dropping Boomi at his house, Mohan and Lalitha left
“Why not we convey about her whereabouts. It’s good for her. These people are really good” Lalitha broke the silence
Mohan stopped the car on the left and turned towards Lalitha “Did you notice the confidence and pride in his face. I wanted to meet Guna badly, Yes! But trust me Lalitha, I doubt whether we showered Meera with the love as much as Guna has on her. That’s unconditional, purest, motherly, did you notice?”
“I envy him. I thought only we love her this much” Lalitha smirked
“I want to test this. I am not going to reveal about anything. I would like to watch this game, where this is going to end? Let me see whether Guna is successful in bringing her back in 2 months’ time. I want to see how he is going to do that. I want to see him to taste the success”
Lalitha “I don’t have anything to say. I don’t agree you though. Fine! Let me call Meera and say what happened here. She will be curious to know about Guna”
“Don’t do that Lalitha” Mohan stopped her. “Just say we met him and he is keeping well. More than that don’t say anything”
“I strongly disagree your thought. You talk to her. I might spill the beans against your wish if I talk” Lalitha turned her face away. She felt Meera should be appraised with Guna’s condition and Guna about Meera’s whereabouts so that they both live in peace. She doesn’t want Meera to suffer alone in a new place. She couldn’t see any value in Mohan’s “Testing”. She decided to stay calm anyways as she doesn’t want to talk against Mohan
Mohan ignored Lalitha and called Meera. He carefully chose the words and made the information as crisp as possible.
Meera felt happy knowing Guna is recovering. “Did he ask about me Mama?”
“What would be your reaction if I answer this question Meera? Are you going to come back to them” Meera kept quiet for his question
“You are worried about Guna. Fine. What about your father Meera? You didn’t ask anything about him?”
“You need to speak to him. I understand your situation why you didn’t talk to him when you were in a state of dilemma. But now, after you spoke to him, you should have understand his point. So far you didn’t know. But that’s not the case now, today, Am I right?” she stayed calm unable to answer his questions
Mohan continued after a pause “Facing issues throughout the life is a type of suffering. When we have shoulders to lean, those problems are equivalent to nothing Meera. But worst suffering is burying everything within the heart and no shoulders to lean. When you fit in former category he fits in latter. He has become dull, lean, looks pale. All without you Meera. I am not sure whether he mourn after Girija’s death though he was sure she won’t come back. But he is mourning every moment without you”
Meera disconnected the call and sobbed heavily. She threw the phone away and buried her head in the pillow.
“I AM NOT GOING BACK… I AM NOT GOING BACK” she yelled like a mad. She was alone in her room as she took off that day, Vadhana left to office
Mohan was surprised by her act.
“Don’t trouble her anymore. Lets give her some space” Lalitha pleaded
Mohan nodded and drove back to his home. “Your questions were right though” Lalitha reviewed for which Mohan remained calm. He is sure that these questions would cause some positive impacts in her
“We should take some steps from our side for she to come back to Guna. And let me watch what steps he takes to get her back” said Mohan while driving.
They reached home, unlocked the door. Mohan relaxed on the sofa stretching his legs and closing his eyes after throwing the phone casually on the sofa.
Prasanna was getting ready to office. Kalyani was arranging the plates and breakfast on the dining table.
“Cheer up Old man. Your Meera is safe somewhere and I can see some brightness in your face” Guna smiled admiring the selfie he and Meera clicked together
“She looks beautiful in this picture. Where did you click this?” Kalyani while coming near Guna happened to notice the pic and started admiring
“One fine morning near our temple. Meera clicked this and shared it with me” replied Guna
Prasanna got an urge to see how Meera looks, especially the girl who won his parent’s heart. He got up from the sofa that’s when Sathya, Partha and Vedha entered. They wanted to meet Guna and enquire about his health before going to office
Kalyani welcomed them and they started casual chit chat. Sathya sat near Prasanna patting his shoulders
“Prasanna, as I have promised Boominathan please start searching for Meera. Its your responsibility” reminded Kalyani
“Hmm, the topic about that girl is not over yet?” pouted Partha
Prasanna nodded affirmatively at Kalyani and grabbed Guna’s mobile to get her picture
Sathya seized Prasanna’s arms, both stunned and froze in shock
To be continued…
Posted now the next episode Amma. How are you doing
Thank you so much Anupama. more emotional episodes to come to unveil father and daughter love
No Aarthi dear. Next episode posted. See who is at the entrance