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Discussion in 'Stories (Fiction)' started by vjbunny, Dec 12, 2011.

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  1. Dec 13, 2011 #11
    vjbunny

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    Hi,
    Thanks will keep in mind...
     
    vjbunny, Dec 13, 2011
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  2. Dec 13, 2011 #12
    esbanu

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    nice write up...
     
    esbanu, Dec 13, 2011
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  3. Dec 13, 2011 #13
    Bpremalatha

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    So sweet...True feelings..Nice one...
    As I used to watch many horror films and horror shows..would always feel scared..I remembered my story..I was not telling my mom..But while sleeping.. somehow managed to hold small side of her blanket tight..So that I feel that she is with me...

    Liked your story..
     
    Bpremalatha, Dec 13, 2011
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  4. Dec 14, 2011 #14
    kkrish

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    Excellent VJB!
    From the start the story gripped mt attention and there was suspense well kept!
    Hats off to you!
    Keep writing and you will earn a lot more avid readers!
     
    kkrish, Dec 14, 2011
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  5. Dec 14, 2011 #15
    vjbunny

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    Dear Esbanu...
    Nice to to know that you liked the story....Thanks for coming...Your fb helps me a lot..
     
    vjbunny, Dec 14, 2011
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    vjbunny

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    Dear Prema...
    Oh I feel happy that you could relate to my story....Thanks for coming..Your FB helps me a lot...
     
    vjbunny, Dec 14, 2011
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    Dear Kamala....
    Oh I am so happy that you read my story n liked it and your nice words mean a lot to me dear....

    Thanks for coming...Your fb helps me a lot...
     
    vjbunny, Dec 14, 2011
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  8. Dec 14, 2011 #18
    vidchakra

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    Dear vj... Welcome to story writing!
    And its a Very very good start... I can understand how glad you must be on your first creation...

    Vj.. Till the end I was wondering what happened to the boy.. You have ended it very well...
    Keep writing more!
     
    vidchakra, Dec 14, 2011
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  9. Dec 14, 2011 #19
    Anisu

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    Dear VJB ,

    A very good start in the fictions world ....the story has come out very well.....
     
    Anisu, Dec 14, 2011
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  10. Dec 14, 2011 #20
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    Good one!.

    I have a small feedback: You kept two similar sounding names for dad & son. That would be bit confusing for fast readers. Fast readers just skim through small details, their mind will register only s..deep
     
    blackbeauty84, Dec 14, 2011
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