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Discussion in 'Stories (Fiction)' started by Tamrakshar, Feb 9, 2018.

  1. Tamrakshar

    Tamrakshar Silver IL'ite

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    "Motive kya hai? To keep forum interesting? Ad revenues?" Probably both!
     
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    Zyada mat Socho :hollering::sconf:
     
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  3. Tamrakshar

    Tamrakshar Silver IL'ite

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    Touche!
     
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    :hello:Pains taking story indeed as revealed by the time of posting; bit lengthy yet pictured the present time. Reminiscent of Similar incident happened some months ago early part of morning in Chennai at Kodambakkam railway station platform.
    Thanks and Regards.
    God Bless Us All Always.
     
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  5. Tamrakshar

    Tamrakshar Silver IL'ite

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    Thanks for your reply, Sir! Always feel free to voice your candid opinion about my blogs. You have also done a great job by bringing it back to the track, as it was going haywire.
     
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    Hmm, the star-crossed tale of Samir and Rima is a modern gothic of love and betrayal. There is a lot to analyse and tease apart in the plot for its literary and cultural merit. I like contemporary stories with all the modern trappings of jagged sentiments set apart from courtly love of the yore. These now-stories speak to us through a next door intrigue between unexceptional lovers. Not as rhetoric and sacrificing as Laila and Majnu but disturbed and vulnerable to the vagaries in love. Sadly, till Mr Thyagi on the scene, there has not been much review feedback on the storyline.

    The locales are interesting! Been ages since I heard about Jadavpur Uni. Had a friend there.

    That's the earliest foreshadow of the tragedy to befall! I wondered, why spinning like a teetotum, out of control, out of force, what is that extended metaphor?

    That was pre-mediated or impulsive. Till the very end, it also hinted at accidental surge. In his anxiety to catch up with Rima, may be Samir pushed the gas pedal firmer and it rushed out of control like that spinning teetotum or was that deliberate.

    Tamrakshar, story had a modern voice with striking language. Thank you @Thyagarajan for an earnest and pertinent feedback in "Stories", a literary and writerly column with the literary and writerly spirit.
     
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  7. Tamrakshar

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    What a pleasant surprise! You are commenting on my blog!:banana::banana::banana:
    Jadavpur University is my university. It has a very impressive campus. Unfortunately, too much of student politics goes on here. Actually, this betrayal happened to one of my friend. However, he didn't protest much, and accepted it as his destiny.
     
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    Whoa ...I didn't notice any 'cordon and strike' military outmanoeuvre around you ...stay away from the suspect ..alert stay away from the suspect. We speculate he might me burly and unhinged. Stay away. All citizens please move to secure areas for cover ...blaring siren. I enjoyed that in Godzilla movie. Did I miss something?

    Salt Lake is the smaller one. You kinda hinted at your stint there with that precision. Few campuses in India are popular for their leafy environs. I was on a tour to Chidambaram campus. The campus was sprawling and woody. Also, there were monkeys scuttling around the campus. Perhaps they wanted to sneak into a biology class room and learn how their human brethren split from them. I feel campus should exhibit more than education in their premises. A certain recreational charm!

    That's very Woody Allen upbeat stance in life. People should strive to recover from romantic upheaval in life. College romances though promising could turn sour or fickle as well. When one progresses to office romances, one is more adapted in life's vagaries.

    I am a meat eater but not a cannibal so don't turn a misplaced flee over my entry. Catch up with me as and when you like. Your story is articulated well in third-person narrative until the switch to the first person till the very end in the last line "Why". I like such drawn out fancy even in casual write up. Your expressions in the story are intense and bracing. But those bouncing bananas in the follow-up expression are the liveliest. See you around.
     
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    You are a kind of idol for me.:worship2::worship2: When an idol talks to a fan, his joy knows no bound!:banana::banana::banana:

    I live in Salt Lake, but studied in the original campus.
     
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    In that case, if anyone is harassing or confounding you, report to me. The Corleone bloodline in me will take care of them. I swear to protect my "only" fan now. I have forged only one fan with kilometres swept blabber of mine. If you persist in descriptive articles, fiction, semi-memoirs, write stuff you would like to shine in, you have more prospects to ally fans that I ever did. Remember, so far I have only one exclamatory fan. Stay focused on your write-up.

    I am not too social, if you catch me aloof elsewhere, it's not you, it's ME. I am self-absorbed and eccentric. You shine away and continue to write distinctive stuff like the modern gothic of Samir and Rima. You don't have to follow proverbial love stories. Strike a niche! Good luck.

    Sidenote: An impressive writer takes the responsibility to steer the thread in the right direction. You have the command and vocabulary. I might not sneak in next time to luff the thread in the right direction and guide the literary spirit in you. But, ensure that you are remembered for the good legacy you leave behind you. Fan, go and shine away now.
     
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