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I Wanted You To Be Like

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by Tamrakshar, Dec 7, 2017.

  1. Tamrakshar

    Tamrakshar Bronze IL'ite

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    I wanted you to be the soft twilight

    Or may be the soothing rays of dawn.

    But you burned my soul

    Like the midsummer scorching sun.



    I wanted you to be the zephyr of spring

    When the bluebirds start singing.

    But you electrocuted me

    Like a white lightning.



    I wanted you to flow like a rivulet

    Where I can enjoy the white stream.

    But you washed me away

    Like a Nile's bad dream.



    I wanted you to be my Bloody Mary

    Which will make me sing.

    But you knocked me out

    Like a cocktail of whiskey and gin.
     
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    ChennaiExpress Platinum IL'ite

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    I like the reference to bluebird
     
  3. periamma

    periamma IL Hall of Fame

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    Very nice.Good expectations
     
  4. Tamrakshar

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    Blue and white are my favourite colours.
     
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    Thanks! Most of the time, there are stark differences between expectations and reality.
     
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    True, happiness equals reality minus expectations. By the way good poem....
     
  7. Tamrakshar

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    Well said Mistt!:smile:
     
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    Well written !
    Love the last stanza !
     
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    Thanks! Do you like that drink?
     
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    Everybody can see the liquor dripping from the verse:
    The Australian wine ?
     

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