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Horror Story : I Am Waiting For You....

Discussion in 'Stories (Fiction)' started by sumalynux, Feb 3, 2018.

  1. sumalynux

    sumalynux IL Hall of Fame

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    No dear. This young girl is around 10year old. Aryan is around 30yrs. If it's child, he should have fathered her when he was around 20.;)
     
  2. sumalynux

    sumalynux IL Hall of Fame

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    Hello friends.

    One of my friend (not in IL) read the story and these days my writing is not upto mark. Not very gripping or taking her to place of imagining characters or happening in the story..

    She said only in my first story. She could really imagine the characters and stuff..

    Please give feedback.. Please feel free to point out which part or characters/situation is not brought out well.. It will help me improve.m
     
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    VinuthaS Silver IL'ite

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    Hi Suma....

    I haven't read your first story...
    I like the way this one is going , but may be you could make them a little long...
    The characters are good...

    All the best ...
     
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  4. Deepika23

    Deepika23 Bronze IL'ite

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    Story is Interesting and scary .
    Could be Aryan killed her in an accident
     
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    Good Going..
    My honest feedback is the story is pacing well with understandable english without unnecessary jargon, sticking to the context without wandering much and also i could visualise everything you have written - like the house they are living, how the characters look.
    I dont see any negatives
     
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  7. kavithamadhan

    kavithamadhan Silver IL'ite

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    Hi Suma,

    after a very long time I logged in indusladies and read all the parts of this story at a stretch...its wonderful...I am very much able to imaging your characters, their home, office and each scene you have mentioned in this writeup....I feel imagination is up to the readers, so don't feel bad.... your writeup is excellent....please write more....

    don't get demotivated....you like writing so write.....and we are waiting here to read....thanks

    waiting for next episode...

    kavitha
     
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    Ya I too feel it’s interesting , but only thing is I’m very much eager to read the next episodes faster !
     
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    I dont feel anything Suma, I can imagine the scenes and characters, it is interesting only. so continue your writings
     
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    Waiting for the next part suma
     
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