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Discussion in 'Poetry' started by GoogleGlass, Sep 2, 2013.

  1. GoogleGlass

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    hey you butterfly
    merrily you fly
    under the sky

    with no limit to your jurisdiction
    and is a fact and no fiction
    only your wings in action

    freedom all the way
    and i have no say
    you fly all day

    you fly around me
    i have no objection
    but i do object to your
    fluttering within my stomach
    when i am eagerly awaiting the
    response to the love i conveyed

    let us come to an understanding
    i shall never come in your way around me
    and you never flutter with in my stomach ever
    rather in anybody's stomach awaiting a love response
    from a person who would to me definitely make more sense
    to my life as the nature to you it is natural for us too butterfly
     
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  2. rgsrinivasan

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    Nice one GG!

    Liked the way you linked those fluttering in your stomach to those that fly.

    Cheers,
    rgs
     
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    Wow!!!
    :clap:
    Googlegee this the first time i've seen you write more than 5-6 lines....
    I thought Rgs would write a response.

    Could i try??
     
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  5. GoogleGlass

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    oh thank you D'.

    I don't take your permission to scribble in your thread then how come you ask my permission - I am offended :)
     
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    Ohhwww!

    I am sorry...
    Hmmm so i've tried something....dont knw if it makes any sense at all.

    I am a butterfly With wings of lace
    I fly carefree and with grace

    I am free to wander everywhere
    Sometimes i sit on roses
    Sometime i fly high up in the air

    One day in the garden
    You told me
    You loved my color & pattern

    But the next day i saw you
    Saying it to another butterfly
    I was hurt and that made me cry

    Say you wont do it again
    Then this butterfly
    Will think of a return
    To you who loved
    my colors & pattern :)
     
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    Wow vallara nannaayittu undu :)

    let's see who continues....
     
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    ThankQ :Bow

    I thought you would continue....hihihi
     
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    I did wanted to but then I was terrified seeing PD :)

    I am dumbstruck with fear - hope she continues...
     
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    Sorry GG, but I would like to, first. Hope PD will take it to the next level too. And you will soar even higher!

    I never felt like flying before.
    My mind was rooted firm.
    You came and shook it to the core,
    Giving it a whole new form.

    It started knowing how to feel
    Alive, and started kicking.
    Like a worm, it then moved and crawled,
    So shaky and often panicking.

    You gave it wings by smiling at me.
    It fluttered unsteady and slow.
    So bewildered, it is, you see!
    It still can't believe, yet flew.

    Its heart expanded; wings spread wide,
    it beamed in joy, hoping you'll say yes.
    It then contracted and then minimized,
    Shuddering if it faced emptiness!

    Halting and going, it gets food,
    Which is nothing but your thoughts.
    You can make it feel very good,
    If only you accept it fast!
     
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