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Against My Will...

Discussion in 'Stories (Fiction)' started by BDivya, Aug 22, 2017.

  1. BDivya

    BDivya Platinum IL'ite

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    Against my will :


    Hello everyone, i am back with another story and a mixed genre. Hope you all find this story interesting!



    Episode 1 :

    Veer was found in a corner with his gaze fixed to the sky. One hand held the juice glass and the other had his brand new iPhone gifted by his wife Nisha. His friend, Karan Mehra, called out loud for him but in vain. Nothing entered into Veer's eardrums. His eyes were still fixed to the sky. No noise in the world could break his gaze, neither the sound of heavy music played by the famous shenoys, nor the call of his bestie.

    As Karan came nearer he saw Veer, now a changed man.

    Veer was well built and handsome. His dark brown eyes could do magic over any girl who looks into them for even a minute. His well grromed attire, his hair set in the most expensive and wonderful smelling gel, an imported one. His left wrist proudly held the Rolex which were partially hidden by the gold blazer pins. And his right hand finger held the most precious and expensive Solitaire in the country. The huge , shiny, expensive solitaire told the world about his wealth as well as another fact that he is married.

    Karan gently shook his sholders. Veer's gaze at once drifted from the sky towards his bestie.

    Karan Mehra, the only son of the richest person in the town, who worked as a trusted partner along with Veer's dad. Karan looked exactly like the twin brother of Veer, in all terms ranging from wealth to looks. Both the boys had a killer look. Karan's mom was the sweetest mother in law anyone could get on earth. Veer always told Karan that , he would never witness the routine mother in law- daughter in law clash. Karan's mother-Akhila Mehra was like Veer's own mother. She had brought up both the boys together. She never saw any difference between them.

    Veer looked into the Pagadi clad (marriage turban) Karan and the excitement in his eyes. He was happy for his best friend and brother. Karan wore a designer white sherwani with a dark blood red pajama and a netted red dupatta which hung around his neck. His pagadi had a diamond designer unique peacock pattern, carefully pinned on his orangish pink pagadi with a dash of gold colour.

    Bro, what made you come to a corner of the party? - Karan

    Nothing bhai, just getting some air. -Veer

    Comeon bro, atleast not today. Come lets go inside. - Karan, saying so he pulled Veer inside the hall and closed the balcony door behind him.

    Thus pulling away Veer from away from his inner voice, away from the gaze, from the wind that said something to Veer, from the dark sky which reflected his mood, from the crescent which made him wonder and from the eternity which he is in search of...


    Against my will...
     
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  2. aarthi28

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    Good start divya dear
     
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    The start captures the interest, Divya. Nice to read the detailed descriptions of wealth, well-groomed, and the few personality points you are telling us about the characters.

    Is there any particular month you had in mind for the wedding? Meaning, which month is it taking place in. Was wondering if it was cool or very cold up there on the terrace. They talk on a terrace, right? If not, is it OK for them to talk there? : )

    Looking forward to the next episode.
     
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    Divya,

    wow narration .. Can I get picture of those guys with killer looks though ??
    You people describe everything so well that I would start imagining ..
    Kick start with a KILLER description ... Is there some bad flashback to Veer .. :fearscream::fearscream: ?
    Why did Karan's mom brought up those two boys .. Veer doesnot ##### ??
    --PS
     
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    Hey nice Divya.....:thumbup:
     
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    Thank u @aarthi28 :):)
    I am always happy to receive ur first feedback :)
    thank u so much for ur continuos support, story-after-story! ;)
     
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    Thank u @Rihana :)
    I am glad that u read my story and liked it too!
    And as always , u amaze me with ur out-of-the-box questions!!!
    I never imagined/thought/even my mind wandered about the 'month' of the wedding!!!
    :):)
    hmmm.. let me think for ur ques...
    The scene takes place on a cold evening, the hero is gazing at the sky from a balcony and the bright crescent shines on him.

    Hope this answers! :)

     
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    thank u so much for ur continuos support PS :):)
    I will bring out the killer picture from my mind and attach it here, for u to have a look at them ! ;)

    Just the first episode, and already PS madam is ready with guesses and questions!!

    Will wait for the following episodes to know the answer ;)
     
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    Thank u sooo much YM :):):)
    glad that u read my first episode :)
     
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    Hey Divya dear!!!!
    Hope you are doing good:blush::blush::blush:
    Good start!:blush:Keep rocking:clap2:
     
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