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Discussion in 'Poetry' started by jskls, Nov 16, 2018.

  1. jskls

    jskls IL Hall of Fame

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    After the sunset
    Sky is Radiantly Red
    For a while

    After the Fall
    A leaf still remains
    On a treetop

    After a flower fades
    Little fragrance
    Still lingers

    After a song ends
    Heart still beats
    To the tune

    After the hurt heals
    Some scars
    Still remain

    Even After
    You are long gone
    Your memories
    Still remain afresh
    Some things
    Are Forever …
     
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  2. iyerviji

    iyerviji Finest Post Winner

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    Super poem after reading your poem the wordings still remains
     
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    Nice poem! Kinda nostalgic and bittersweet.
     
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    @jskls,

    This is so true. More than the act or an event, the impact or the impression it leaves behind lingers on forever.
     
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    Thank you @iyerviji maa for a lovely feedback
     
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    Thanks @BhumiBabe for the appreciation
     
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    Thank you @GeetaKashyap for a lovely feedback. You explain it so easily few words. Impressions remain and isn’t that what we carry forward.
     
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    Good one, jskls. Glad thread got bumped as I had missed it earlier.

    The thoughts in it are deep but words simple. The examples are perfect - sunset, fall-leaf, flower, song, hurt... The mind naturally tries to add to the examples. The series of examples aspect of the poem reminds me of the Ek ladki ko dekha song.

    The memory could be of anything.... a person, a relationship, a movie, a book, a song, a hope, a goal, a milestone, an achievement, an effort............

    A true blessing is to reach the state where one looks back at such memory with more warmth and less desolation in the mind.
     
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    @Rihana Thank you for your lovely feedback. So true some memories leave us with a good feeling and to have many many more of them is a true blessing
     
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    @jskls Words are like a gentle breeze which is felt even after it crosses. Very nice Poem
     
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