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Discussion in 'Poetry' started by messedup, Jul 19, 2018.

  1. messedup

    messedup Platinum IL'ite

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    I am not like you
    I can't talk like you I can't walk like you
    I can't love like you I can't hate like you
    I can't have knowledge like you I can't be perfect like you
    I have my own way outs
    I am trying to streamline everything but not like you
    I am raising my level of understanding but not like you
    I am facing challenges my way not like you
    I can't be like you and I don't want to be like you
    I may be learning from you but not implemented it like you
    As you can't be like me and I can't be like you.
     
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    Good start, @messedup.
    I am musing over an extra line that can altogether tilt this the way we like to.
    For example, "Yet, I like you, as an opposite pole" or end it poignantly like, "Like you, I won't give up!" -rgs
     
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    Thanks for the suggestion. You are good at writing but that's the main point. Your suggestion is good but I am not a writer like you. Hope you understand. :)
     
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    Sorry @messedup, for taking the liberty to add further to your original post. And I understand!
    I still am a beginner when I search words to describe what I feel. -rgs
     
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    Please don't say sorry. You are really too good and I like everything that you write. Keep it up.
     
  6. GeetaKashyap

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    Nice beginnings, dear m.


    You don't be my clone,
    And let me not be yours.
    Let's simply learn a
    Few things from each other.
    All of us are unique
    And let us celebrate that!

     
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    Thanks for the reply....yes let's just celebrate. I learnt a lot here and always wonder how everyone here is so nice and talented. But I can't be same as them and i know that I have to win my battle not the race.
     
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    Dear m,

    Everyone has their own unique circumstances and battles to win. There can be no comparison.
     
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    You are right as always. :)
     
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    Nice one OP.

    You are you
    I am me
    We are unique
    Individually
    Together we
    Can be Complete
     
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