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Ghost Story: You Killed Me

Discussion in 'Stories (Fiction)' started by Tamrakshar, Dec 26, 2018.

  1. Mistt

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    @Tamrakshar
    I was so deeply involved in reading a love/romantic chapters until the last sentence and I had looked for some hint in the finished chapters to think about ghost/killer but you are so talented at hiding the clues.:thumbup:Waiting to read next chapters of the story.
     
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    Thanks GK for the comment! The story is moving towards the climax, and hopefully you will find it interesting.
     
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    Mistt, many thanks for your constant encouragement and support! I am glad that you are enjoying the story. The story will end by 23 chapter. Hopefully, you will find the remaining chapters interesting.
     
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    Chapter 17
    Nemesis returns
    Tara seemed to be a courageous girl, as she took no time to recompose her.

    "That has to be a nocturnal bird! We are missing a torch." There was no hint of fear in her voice.

    "Yes, I would like to agree with you." I said it without any conviction, as I had never heard this kind of sound in my entire tenure here.

    We walked hurriedly. None of us carried any torch, as we could not foresee that our rendezvous would last so long. I was thinking about that uncanny sound. But, Tara goaded me to narrate my story, as we moved along.

    I didn't hide anything. I told her about Sara and Sona and their unfortunate deaths. I also told her about the uncanny creature, which the girls had claimed to have seen. I didn't forget to tell her that I myself had experienced that fetid smell.

    Moving on the narrow hilly road in the dark itself was very difficult. Fortunately, Tara, being the local girl, knew the places like the palm of her hand. She was holding my hand and showing the path. That day had to be a new moon day, as I could not see even a hint of the Moon. I could feel the pressure of her hand when I narrated the grisly deaths. She didn't say much when I was describing my story.

    After finishing, I asked, "Now you must know why I was afraid of meeting girls?"

    By that time, we came to a point where then onwards I could recognise the road. It would not take more than 10 minutes to reach her home. But, Tara was not saying anything for long. Shaking her hand I asked, "What? Scared?"

    Tara didn't answer that question, but she herself asked, "Are you sure you experienced a fetid smell?"

    "Yes, more than once!"

    "What was it like? Like dried fish or rotten meat?"

    "Well, more like a dried fish."

    We have entered the locality, and a very dim light was coming from few scattered houses. I could see that Tara was going to say something. But she could not, as suddenly out of nowhere a putrid smell filled the air around us.

    "Oh my! This is the smell I was talking about." I shouted, and I could feel that adrenaline began to flow in my blood.

    "Run, run towards the home", there was something in my voice that made Tara to obey without any delay. We both ran as hard as possible towards Tara's house. For few seconds the smell seemed to have followed us. But when we reached Tara's house, the smell had gone.

    Five of us were sitting on Bahadur's small drawing room. The door was closed. Bahadur's wife brought hot tea for us. There was small fireplace inside the room. Singeing of woods was able to give a mild fight to the overwhelming cold.

    Tara might have taken her family into confidence regarding our relationship. That was why they were not shocked to see me with her, but they were surprised to see us running scared. Tara told them briefly about what had happened in my past, and what happened just now.

    "There has to be the presence of a demonic entity, I am sure." Tara opined like a paranormal investigator.

    "What? How do you know?" My jaw dropped, as I asked her.

    To be continued
     
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    @Tamrakshar,

    Gripping narration! Waiting for a showdown between Tara and the ghost:boxing::grinning-smiley-048:
     
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    Now, the story becomes very interesting and Your well description made me will wait for next chapters so eagerly.
     
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    Nice episode. Liked it.
     
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    GK, your feedback is valuable to me. You are right, Mr Ghost will not find it easy this time.
     
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    Thanks Mistt! Hopefully, I will publish the next episode tonight.
     
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